Feedback on our first treatment: key points

- Using interpretive dance can be ineffective, idea to use the dances that fit more with the music

- Using the build-up of the lights to gradually make the two dancers silhouettes - interesting

- The third element is too ‘fluid’ for the music, requires something jumpier

- The third element needs to link with whole music video to make it ‘complete’

- The third element needs to also be more interesting, and more filmable (fish and ink gets uninteresting too quickly)

-Could try to add variety to the first element - have her in all red in a white room, then swap and have her in all white in a red room.
-Idea with fish should be checked as it can kill fish itself and tank for it may be too expensive

-Song does not fit with ink and water idea as it is not ‘fluid’

-Finding a choreographer may be tricky

-Smoke mushrooms don't fit the idea, as they are brown. Red mushrooms connote drugs, don't use them unless this is what you want.

-An idea with fish in the aquarium is good. You can even try to film dancers through the aquarium to link 2nd and 3rd elements.