Feedback on our first treatment: notes

When Andrew was pitching our idea, the rest of the group were writing notes so later on, we can change our idea to make it better.

So here are notes that we have:

Feedback

Chasing highs
10 million hits
Dancer, like the light, but how the dancers are present can look not as ideal
Consider the light of the bulbs, how it changes the colour of the wall
Takes time to shoot the bulbs element and build it
The light of the bulbs can change with the wall
Best not to kill the fish
The third element it’s very important
Have to have something else that links every element other than the colour
Think about what the image says rather than just the colours
And how fluent the dance is, the song it’s not exactly fluent
Think about the third element again
And the colours, maybe make it contrasting

Song: good track, not fluid- not really good for contemporary and fish swim

Concept: need choreograph, light is good, red can change to white because of light, better not to kill fish, something should link the third idea with previous, have to buy a fish tank - expensive, add something interesting- building up, ink not working with the song, third element!!! , red set white sofa idea - contrast, third element should tie everything together, have to think about the girl (cast)